Now that you have gotten feedback from a real audience, you can see what a difference there is between feedback and great feedback. When you comment on this post, please answer the following questions in complete sentences. Make sure to really share some great thinking.
1. How did you feel about the feedback you got?
2. Does this feedback help you see why it is so important to be specific?
3. Please describe the feedback you wish you received.
Here is an example answer so that you can see what kind of comments I expect:
Ms. Vander Velde,
I did not feel good about the feedback I got because I did not really learn much. I do not think I can improve my story with the feedback I received. I can see that it is important to be specific. When people just write "nice job" it makes me feel like they really didn't have anything to say about my story. It's almost as if they didn't even listen to me when I read my piece. I know that some parents had a hard time since they didn't know what to write, and I know that some parents had a hard time writing in English, but I definitely have some ideas about the feedback I wish I received. I wish that people had written specific feedback that told me more about how to make my writing better, or told me more about what was great in my piece.
Your friend,
Johnny
Now, please go ahead and comment. Use my example as an example. Please do not just copy what I wrote. Use your own words and your own thoughts.
Thanks!~ Ms. Vander Velde
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15 years ago
10 comments:
Dear Ms.V,
I liked the feedback I got but I got one that said "Good" and I don't really think that she payed attention to the details in my story and really thought about my story and I really like the feedback from my mom she said,"It was a great story and she's remembered when It happened."But you know that parents are sometimes boring.I really like comments from people and that was a good idea when we shared our stories I really liked it and it was fun to share!
Love Angelica
Dear Ms. V,
I got 2 feedback papers. They both have got good feedback on them. I think I did really good.
From,
Jody
Dear Ms.V,
From the feedback I got I feel that you Ms.V have really helped me.Yes it does help me to see why it's important to be specific.My feedback was that I really show my turning points.
Dear Miss.V,
My feedback was kinda good it said that I read good and I have good writing she also said that i described it very well.
With the feedback I got I thought I needed a little bit more details.
P.S My Mom wrote it
from
Jessica
Dear Miss V,
I didn't like any of the feedback I got from the adults because they all just wrote "good" and "nice" and it makes me feel like they didn't even listen to my story and that I just read and did all that work for nothing! I wish that the feedback I got would have been more specific on what they thought I needed to add and what they really thought about my story.
From,
Dany
Dear Ms. V
I liked the comment I got because. I did so much better then last year. It took lots of fixing and editing. I'm glad no body said just nice job like people did to Johnney. Lots of people said great and nice job. I liked my feedback a lot.
Hamadi
Dear Ms V,
I can not really improve my writing by what was written about my story. All it said was;good.
Your friend
Cheyanne
Dear Ms.V,
The New England colonies are Maine(1620),New Hampshire(1622),Massachusetts(1620),Connecticut(1633)
,Rhode Island(1636).
The Middle colonies are New York(1624),
Pennsylvania(1682),New Jersey(1664),and Delaware(1638).
The Southern colonies are Maryland(1632),Virginia(1607),North Carolina(1712),South Carolina(1712),Geogia(1732).
What I learned was that the Mexican colonies are mixed with Native American's.
sighed by
Jonathan
Dear Miss V,
I did fell good about the feedback because I think that I learn more than enough.But I still want to learn more about writting because I want to became a great wtitter so I can hook me reader.I think that when my writting partner said that I hook her in that makes me feel proud of myself.Viridiana is the only person I can tell my stories to in class because she is my writting partner in writting.Will Miss V said talk to your partner I tell Viridiana my story in she already to listen.As when is her turn I listen as she listen to mind.
Evelin
Dear Miss.Vander Velde,
I feel happy the feedback I got back because the parent that gave me the feedback told me a nice thing about what I wrote.This feedback does help me to see why its so important because she wrote me a specific.The feedback I got is ''I like that way she kept looking for her diary until she found it.
Love,
Gina
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